W.A.L.T: Write a Descriptive piece of writing of this picture using Descriptive language.
It was a dark and cloudy night and I was standing outside this old broken house thinking if I should go in. All I can hear is the house creaking and breaking.
My tummy says I should not go in but my mind is telling me to go in, but then I hear this voice calling my name, “Jack-Jack" come on in it is nice and warm” I am so scared to say anything to the person because I don’t know what the person is going to do or say next.
I finally decided to go into the house, when I walk up to the door the stairs creak as I walk on them. I knock on the door but then the door just falls over. I walk in so scared hoping nothing bad happens. Holding my breath every step I take. When I walk in all I can see is spider webs and bugs all over the walls and the roof.
What I did well: setting out my work in paragraphs,
What I need to work on: my editing on my work,
What I found easy: coming up with ideas and Descriptive words.
Hey Kurtis, Angie here, you did a good job on arranging the paragraphs. Maybe next time put more punctuations, and more adjectives to describe the noun. Other than that, keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteThank you Angie, I will do that, and thank your for the feedback.
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