W.A.L.T: write a story buy showing not telling.
Pig the Pug was a dog and he is very fat. He had massive eyes the size of oranges,
And also the tiniest feet and paws, that when he walked he falls over all the time. When pug smiled all you could see is his ugly old teeth. Pig the Pug had the pointiest ears I have ever seen my life.
Pig is one of the bossiest pugs there has ever been on this earth. He does not care about anyone else, he only cares about himself. He is a very arrogant pug. Pig the pug bosses his friends around and his friends can’t say no.
Pug has one deadly behavior, he is very mean to other people and it makes them feel unwanted and sad. What pug says to his friends is not very nice and he doesn't think how it will make his friends feel. His friend Trevor is a very forgiving dog because he forgives what pig the pug has said to him.
We might believe that pug was a well-kept dog but really he liked to keep his room in a pig stye. Pig appears not to pick up after himself, he leaves his dirty washing on the floor, his food scraps on his table or ln the floor. Pig the Pugs keeps all his toys on the floor and does not pick up after himself. Pig leaves all his nice spray and deodorant laying on the floor for his friend Trevor to steep on. All in the end Pig the Pug is a very dirty pug and does not consider anyone else but himself.
What I found hard: Trying to turn my language features into show not tell
What I could do better: Put in more descriptive words.
What I found easy: Thinking of the different type of words to describe pig the pug.
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